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1  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Show us your Pals, we rate it. on: February 17, 2019, 07:13:09 PM
Isn't this supposed to be on PLP?
Why does it matter?
2  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Show us your Pals, we rate it. on: February 15, 2019, 10:27:36 PM
9/10

I think those colors blend in very well. Cheesy
3  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Papa Louie Pals Short Comic SEND YOUR FC BEFORE SAT on: February 13, 2019, 07:31:40 PM
4  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 3 IS OUT!!!) on: February 12, 2019, 07:59:15 PM
Nice chapter! And if I may, can I give a small critique on your comic?

I appreciate that you want to give every character equal "screentime," but this can be a bit tedious and takes up most of the chapter. It's not necessary to make 15+ scenes just to let your audience know that all characters are walking towards the tables. You could probably use maybe five characters in one scene to get your point across, or maybe even have one of your characters say, "Let's go to the tables!" or something to that extent.

I hope this helps, and I wish you luck for the rest of your comic. Wink
Thank you for the advice. I will think about that from now on. I don't really feel like editing my last 3 parts to meet those criteria.
5  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 3 IS OUT!!!) on: February 12, 2019, 07:39:07 PM
6  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 2 IS OUT!!!) on: January 26, 2019, 03:50:26 PM
Spoiler Alert:
In the next part, I will be changing the outfits of every single character, including your FC's, so don't say "You got Pam's outfit wrong." if she has a different outfit on.
Cool chapter, “Mr.” NachoCheeseOnPizza!
Ha ha! Thank you! Smiley
7  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 2 IS OUT!!!) on: January 26, 2019, 03:46:30 PM
Problems solved. Wink
8  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 2 IS OUT!!!) on: January 26, 2019, 09:10:49 AM
Interesting part!  Smiley However, there are some errors on my FCs designs i'd like to point out. RJ's skin is lighter and so is some of the shades on Elise's clothes (particularily her jacket) also, Alicia's beanie is a lighter shade of green.
Is this any better?
9  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 2 IS OUT!!!) on: January 25, 2019, 10:47:52 PM
10  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 1 IS OUT!!!) on: January 12, 2019, 08:35:16 PM
Brother Z: Awesome part! I like how you did Alex!  Cheesy But one ensy-weensy fix, Alex's shoes are light brown, not light grey.  Wink
Problem solved.
11  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: SEND YOUR FCs//The Appocalypse Mashup (Part 3) on: January 12, 2019, 07:15:07 PM
Ok. Here's David, Jane, James, and Delaney.




Oh, and make James and Delaney slightly smaller than they appear to signify children.
12  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 1 IS OUT!!!) on: January 12, 2019, 07:04:31 PM
It looks fine for me.

Also, nice chapter! I wonder what's up with this special dinner.
You'll find out in the next part.
13  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 1 IS OUT!!!) on: January 12, 2019, 07:01:23 PM
Don't ask why the second scene is bigger than the rest of them. I don't know what I did wrong. I resized the picture and everything. It just didn't work.
14  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (PART 1 IS OUT!!!) on: January 12, 2019, 06:59:22 PM
15  Apps / Papa Louie Pals / Re: Poisonous Syrup (COMING SOON) on: January 02, 2019, 06:39:08 PM
Unfortunate news! I got a new phone and I lost my old one. All the scenes that I began to make have been deleted. Part 1 will not come out for a while. Anyways, that's all the FC's I'm using. No more. Sorry.
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